I stagger up to the derelict house as I glare up looking at the spooky house on the shadow hill. I put my hand on the rusty gate as It slowly opens making a creaking sound. Lightning strikes below in the unsearchable fog. I gulp. I firm my hands as I run into the fog. I glare around searching for the hill until a scream echos in my ear. It's in the other direction. I run to the mysterious scream. As I charge with all my energy I run to it as I stare with fright. There is a doll on the floor with a piece of paper written in blood it says HELP ME!
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I open the door as a big squeaking sound echos in my ear. A pitch black room with absolutely nothing in there. I hear the door slam behind me. I gulp. As I breath slowly not trying to make a sound I trip over a piece of paper. I glare as I can just see writing on the paper.It says SAVE YOURSELF! in really warm kinda liquid until I realized what it was. It was blood. I walk around petrified as I hear a loud gunfire I jump in shock I quickly try to find the door. I find it. I jump out and start running . I stop for a break.'' Why is there red paint on the ground?'' I say. I looked down at my belly with a big bloody hole with blood oozing like a fountain as i tumble to the ground. I have been shot.
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2. when I'm in first person i need to describe the persons feelings. I walk in a pitch black forest as I run to my mysterious cave searching for my secret weapon.
I hear humans flickering the torches it was time to move. I run out of the cave ready to run but I saw a human standing right in front of me. I leap into the air grasping a tree branch and I quickly start climbing . The human grabbed out a mysterious weapon and starts shooting at me. I climb higher. I look down seeing my species habitats get destroyed by the humans. They are burning it. I call my brothers as I hear terrifying screams from my species. We are called the luatars. Wet droplets run down my face as I realize what the future awaits. Splat! Reading: I think I have improved my reading skills from Term 1 because I have learned more vocabulary and I read it carefully so I get what I’m reading.
Maths: I think that I have improved in maths, e.g. I actually improved in IKAN but I still need to work on my fractions and putting them to a percentage. Writing: I think I have improved a lot in writing because I can make something exciting when I write and I can create great images to lead me to a good story. Aspire: I think I’m doing really well with my Aspire in Term 1. It was really challenging but really fun and it gets me prepared for next year and now I’m doing Science Fair which is real fun. Social: I am really happy that I have great friends who have got my back and I still have to work on time management.
His rough body scrapes my arms as its arms swarm around me. His smell flows around me as I smelt every flavour. Mysterious colours flicker at my eyes as I stare at the purple glazing eyes. He smells like twisted sour bubblegum drifting in the air as it gets right up my nose. Its electrocuting tail wraps around my leg ready for strike. Its ferocious feet stomps on the ground shaking the room. His antennas sway gleaming at you with different expressions. I decide to put it as a 5 out of 10 as I get ready to judge the next chair robot. TENT STORY by Shaquille
Wind gushes inside the tent making everything get swooped away. Snow gushes into my face as I stare at the beautiful sight in front of me. Its now time to go on a adventure. I grab my material as I staggered outside the tent. Chills swarm through my body as I grab some tools out, its time to climb. I charge up the steep hill mountain as I look at every step I take. More wind blows at my body as I tumble down back to the flat area. I sigh. I stare up at the huge mountain thinking about how many times I have tried to get up. As I try to climb one more time I hear a big crack and I look up. “Its an avalanche!” I run down as the avalanche swoops at my feet. I fall face first as the white soft snow leaps over my body. Gasping for air I managed to make a hole for air and I looked out. The whole mountain had collapsed. As I use all my force I manage to get out and right in front of me is a dead person who is frozen solid... MY CAMP RECOUNT
I quickly race in the pitch black night as i scavenge through my bag looking for my torch the countdown is starting. I race to the swarm of people lining up ready for spotlight I start wondering who I should go with. 5,4,3,2,1go!! . I gulp, the game has now started. I quickly race across the forest looking at the people surging one way. I leap across the logs and mud as I see flickers of light flashing over the mountain top. I duck. I hear screams on the other hillside. I knew it was time to move. I quietly climb up the muddy stinky hill trying to find where the flickering light was until i finally see flickers of light up the hill. I bolt up the hill following their footsteps so I won’t fall. I then realized they had the same plan as me. I finally had caught up them and we started heading across the flying fox bridge. I smile. I stare at the finish seeing all the people sitting down I knew then I would make it. I get to the finish and show my friends my sticker I couldn’t believe I made it. As Miss Smart counts down to zero i rush down the hill to the bottom and quickly race to the hall. All the hard work and now finally I’m here collecting my prize. I think about all I went through climbing up a muddy hill, dodging logs,hearing screams and i managed to make it. And here I stand eating my prize as I get ready for supper. By Shaquille |
AuthorHi my name is Shaquille and am in room 3 at Balmacewen School my favorite hobbies are sports music and much much more I am 11 years old and I love food such as chocolate i have curly hair and i'm very tall. Archives
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