As I slowly walked up to the door step i shiver in fear my mind doesn't know whats through the door i'm hopeing its something alright, suddenly I take another step thinking why did i get a letter saying to come here who is it from, as my fingers got closer to the door bell i heard foot prints I couldn't put up with this anymore i had to open the door it was pitch black i turned on the light to hear HAPPY BIRTHDAY.
1 I need to add a bit more descriptive language and some smiles.
2 And to re read to make sure everything makes sense. There is a fluffy slouching green monster that lives in a cave down by a river bank, he has big bodging eyes and thick eye brows with sharp pointy teeth that stick out of his mouth. He might sound scary but he is not, he is extremely nice fluffy monster who get judged for what he looks like, he has silky green fur that over laps his back. Massive feet that stomp on everthing and anything in its way sheep ,cows, trees .
Reading: I am improving in reading with expression ,but want to improve my understanding in what I am reading a bit more . Writing: I am adding lots of describing words throughout my writing but need to work on re- reading through a couple of times to improve it. Maths: I can sometimes pick up the strategies pretty quickly but need to keep practicing my math at school and at home. ASPIRE: For my term 1 aspire I thinkIi was a bit rushed but I presented it well and got it in on time and was happy with what I did. Social: I get along with people really well and I think my time management is good. I work well in groups . goals reading- I want to understand more in what I am reading writing- I want to take time to re read my writing though and not rush it. Chair Description!!! As the glow of the bright light lit up the middle of the room, there sat a big bouncey green gummy bear chair staring at me with its big pop out eyes. When I decided to sit down on the chair the smell of fresh cut lime got stronger and stronger,and I sunk deeper and deeper into the as squishy as a marshmallow chair it was so soft I could almost disappear off into another world. As I were still sinking deeper and deeper the blue and white striped arms started to play with my eyes, the arms were moving round and round making my eyes go funny, I felt my eyes getting heavier and heavier as I slipped away into dream land.THE END! Tent Description
Its my first day camping up on the mountains and all I can see around me is the sight of snow going for miles and miles like a big white blanket. I could hear the breeze whistling noise of the wind whizzing past me , how was I going to last this terrible , cold weather?. As I up from rattling of my tent I peeked outside to see and feel the cold breeze blowing on me, but I was surprised to feel or see nothing it was silence.There was no snow storm no cold breeze just the sight of the big bright blue sky high above and the cars below that looked like little coloured specks of dust zooming along the road. It was perfect just perfect. By Olivia Tent Description
Its my first day camping up on the mountains and all I can see around me is the sight of snow going for miles and miles like a big white blanket. I could hear the breeze whistling noise of the wind whizzing past me , how was I going to last this terrible , cold weather?. As I up from rattling of my tent I peeked outside to see and feel the cold breeze blowing on me, but I was surprised to feel or see nothing it was silence.There was no snow storm no cold breeze just the sight of the big bright blue sky high above and the cars below that looked like little coloured specks of dust zooming along the road. It was perfect just perfect. By Olivia Camp
10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1 Go a i sprinted up the hill jumping behind trees seeing everybody sneaking up behind me trying not to get spotted.I could hear people murmling , bushes rustling I could smell the pine trees all around me. I could see the lights flashing and hear the adults yelling out spotlight , and then the light was coming closer to me so I stood silently behind a tree watching and waiting for for the glowing light to go away. As I got closer to the top where all the adults were I dropped down on to my knees and scuttled up the hill feeling all the sticks and squishy mud on my hands YUCK. Im almost there I cant believe it. I keep on scuttling up the hill until I heard a voice say spotlight.As I slowly turned round hoping they werent talking to me there behind me stood Miss Hodges with a torch in her hand, OH NO. I had a really awesome time playing spotlight and cant to next camp. I because i really enjoyed sneaking up the hill and seeing all the light go past me quickly. By Olivia |
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