As I walk up to a dark scary house I see the lights flicker on and off. When I try and open the gate I see a dodgy looking guard dog under the holy stairs. I try and open it but it doesn't budge so I keep trying and finally I hear a creek as the big rustic gate opens. Then I remember there was a big black dog so I decide to try and find another way in. As I creep around the front corner in the hard to see fog. When I climb up a vine to the open window at the top of the big building but ....
1. I need to describe what my characters doing a bit more.
2. In persuasive writing I need to work on my conclusion linking it back to the main points. His green soft fluffy fur covers his body for warmth during the long dark nights. As his big eyes awaken , his long spotted tongue catches fly for breakfast. When hes walking his big toenails sink into the dirt to help steady his walking style. His sharp pointy teeth chomp away the tall trees in the forests. When hes trying to hide from predators its hard because of his big head and his giant feet . He is one of the only species around.
WRITING: I am doing well on my writing but I need to improve on extending my stories. MATHS: My basic facts is going well but I need to improve on my strategies , to extend the range of strategies I can use. ASPIRE: I got enough research for term 1s aspire but I need to improve on my conclusion. READING: I am doing well on my reading worksheets but I need to start to read more books. SOCIAL: I am making lots of new friends but I need to talk to them more often. GOALS: Fitness- to improve my long distance running. Reading - to read more books. Writing - to be more specific and descriptive. Spelling - improve to move up a spelling group. As I walk into a room I see this lonely colourful chair sitting in the dark musty corner with a bright light hanging over it. As I start to sink into the soft chair I thought I heard a little scream. The chair smells like its been in a garbage bin for a year or two. When its night time those demon horns light bright red and it looks like it’s going to charge at you. The rug in front of the chair looks like a bright yellow sun gleaming up at you. With the green seat it looks like long green grass and the spots on the back of the couch looks like a leopard. As I start to climb this huge mountain I think to myself am I going to make it. When I start to get closer I feel the temperature drop because I’m getting deeper into the thick icy snow. I look at the big wonky rocks in front of me and think thats a good spot to sleep for the long dark night. As I relax in my tent I look at the beautiful stars and doze off to sleep. When I woke up I wonder where I am but then I remember that i’m climbing a huge mountain. Before I doze off again I open my tent door and look at the beautiful sun rise but I stay up and start to get ready for the big day ahead.
SPOTLIGHT
5,4,3,2,1 Go. Walking down the dark quiet road I hear a scream. I start to sprint up the massive hill. As I crawl through the long grass im thinking to myself am I going to survive and also thinking where are the parents. Walking round a tree I hear a parent say spotlight and I look at the torch.Thats the end of me. As I was getting closer to the top of the hill I bumped into something i don’t know what it was but I think it was a huge tree. I start limping back up the hill. |
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