-I need to work on adding more description in my story's.
- I also need to work on not adding the same sentence in my story more then twice.
- I also need to work on not adding the same sentence in my story more then twice.
-I need to work on adding more description in my story's.
- I also need to work on not adding the same sentence in my story more then twice.
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"Mummy,Mummy,Mummy".
"I can hear a cracking noise outside. "Can I have go and have a look" . "Yes you can Snowy". "Oh thanks mum". "Oh No". "The ice is breaking it's the end of the world". "I don't know what to do". "I do now what to do". " I will go and get some duck tape and tape it together"(So Snowy goes and gets the tape) "Mummy,mummy,mummy, look I fixed the ice with duck tape". "What did you do darling"... Charters : Bull 1 Bull 2 Bull 3 Crocodile Bull 1: What is that thing. Bull 2: It's a,wait I don't know. Bull 1: It's a crocodile. Bull 2: No it's a log. Bull 1: It's a crocodile. Bull 2: Log. Bull 1: (Throws a rock) crocodile Bull 2: Log. Bull 1: (pokes the animal) Bull 2: Log. Bull 1:(Splashes water at the animal,then jumps on it) Crocodile: (Eats bull 1) Bull 2: Crocodile. Bull 3: Log. My beady eyes stared at the creature.It's bright green skin was shining in the light as the sun went up.It's bushy black eyebrows looked like it wasn't brushed in months.I felt like it never blinked, it just started at me.His razor sharp teeth looked like they were good for hunting.It's fins were like penguin fins.But it didn't stop there...
The monsters feet looked like they were as big as his head.This monster was very different than any other monsters because ,he lived not in a cave,not in the junkyard,he lived in the town of Monsterville.With all the other monsters.He was nice and friendly. Reading: I am improving on my summarizing and since I can do that I understand what I am reading now. I need to improve on my reading the story so fast that I don’t read it properly.
Writing: I am now not struggling and I have moved up a group. I am doing well with my times tables. I need to improve on my 12 times table. Writing: With my writing I am writing more interesting stories and I am very happy with my writing. I need to improve on my editing. Aspire: I am doing well with my Aspire and the research. I need to work on my time management. Social: I have made lots of friends and I have lots of new BFFs. I need to work on speaking more kindly with my friends.
I see the chair, the pink -fluffy-candy floss like chair. It was slowly moving away making this weird noise like " meow meow meow". Then could smell this nose piercing smell. It smelt like a can of fish that just got opened. I couldn't believe my eyes as started to turn GREEN everywhere so it was green AND pink. The chair stopped, I quietly sat on it making this "ewwww" noise. Then it's greeny grassy arms got hold of me, I was stuck... Then it's snowy eyes shut and I was free. Now I was in my bed awack thinking it was only a dream. I woke up, all I could see was snow, white cold soft snow. I felt cold like I was going to freeze. I popped my head out the door there was a beautiful view and it was really peaceful. I look up in the sky and I saw a sky with no clouds. I look in my tent there's sunlight every where it looks like the sun shining in my tent. Now I was thinking I am really this high up. I was wondering was I here alone I didn't remember. After drinking some hot chocolate I felt better like I could remember things. Now I was having another little sleep when I heard this GRRR! I woke up. I looked around nothing there was only snow flakes dripping down like the rain. Then I thought I'm not alone.
This is me lily. My favourite author is jacqueline wilson. I love pizza bqq chicken. My bffs are izzy, vaiaio and jasmine. I love reading books and eating ice-cream candyfloss ice-cream. :)
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