The sea blue eyes stare into my soul.I smell freshly baked waffles drifting around the chair. she gives me a evil look telling me to go away but I dont. I sink into the chair and syrup trickles down my leg.the waffle. She tries to buck me off by waving her her legs around wildly I almost fall into a pit of butter melting from the waffle the waffle.She fly’s up to the ceiling and does a little dance to try and get me off and sticks out her horn and begins poking me .She makes a MASSIVE hole in my NEW jersey.I get really annoyed so I jump of. I’m NEVER going on that crazy wild thing again!!
The sea blue eyes stare into my soul.I smell freshly baked waffles drifting around the chair. she gives me a evil look telling me to go away but I dont. I sink into the chair and syrup trickles down my leg.the waffle. She tries to buck me off by waving her her legs around wildly I almost fall into a pit of butter melting from the waffle the waffle.She fly’s up to the ceiling and does a little dance to try and get me off and sticks out her horn and begins poking me .She makes a MASSIVE hole in my NEW jersey.I get really annoyed so I jump of. I’m NEVER going on that crazy wild thing again!!
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Lily
6/3/2014 01:15:10 pm
wow izzy your art looks amazing and i like the story how you put a lot of things that you like in it.
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Sarah
6/3/2014 03:48:13 pm
I liked how you said syrup trickles down my leg.
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Saoirse
6/4/2014 04:11:27 pm
hi i love you writing but part doesn't make sense (melting from the waffle the waffle.) I really like how you used CAPITALS to make an impact on your writing :) :) :) :) :) !
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Kaea
6/4/2014 06:37:22 pm
Shot, Izzy!!! I liked how you described it's sea blue eyes staring into your soul. Personally, though, I think most of us, including you and I, are able to get more descriptive than sea blue. Cerulean, perhaps? Anyways, I also how you added emphasis by using capital letters in place of lowercase letters, and how you brought the unipaffle, your own original character, into play.
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Blake;)
6/10/2014 03:17:12 pm
Wow! Your art is creative and colorful, it really over powers the plain yellow background.I also like how you wrote about the smell of waffle drifting around the room:)
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