As I walk up to a dark scary house I see the lights flicker on and off. When I try and open the gate I see a dodgy looking guard dog under the holy stairs. I try and open it but it doesn't budge so I keep trying and finally I hear a creek as the big rustic gate opens. Then I remember there was a big black dog so I decide to try and find another way in. As I creep around the front corner in the hard to see fog. When I climb up a vine to the open window at the top of the big building but ....
1. I need to describe what my characters doing a bit more.
2. In persuasive writing I need to work on my conclusion linking it back to the main points. |
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