By Vaiaio!!!
As I hear the sound of footprints coming towards me I slowly creep into my brilliant hiding spot.When he steps to the green car next to me i needed to warn him.So I started barking like crazy and it was so funny.He got frightened then some how he was thinking something like "Just wait for my revenge".You could tell by his face.His first attempt didn't work but his other attempts did.Then I saw this dark shadow dog in his car.I tried to wine the window down down as fast as I could.I tried all these random buttons and then staring at the one!Though i was gonna press the button.I wondered if i should let him get eaton or let him live.I felt like getting out of the car so I pressed the button anyways.Then he got into the car and rode away :( By Vaiaio!!!
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SAOIRSE!!! :-)
7/28/2014 06:01:30 pm
Cool writing! I luv the start bit-
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izzy
8/3/2014 07:25:07 am
hey vai, i love how you said just wait for the revenge.
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Mrs Garthwaite
8/10/2014 06:28:00 pm
You are beginning to build a fun story describing the dog in the car. Re-read your story to make sure you have included all the important points. Check your punctuation and spelling too.
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Lily
8/12/2014 07:31:30 am
I love your story Vai.I love how you said that you want revenge.Next time you want to improve it try and add more to the end of the story.
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