His stripey tail was hiding in a dark,misty corner.His peachy hands shivering in the cold.his pearling eyes simmer in the dawn’s light.His yellow thundering ears shine brightly in the cold.He smells like a tropical and yummy bubble gum chewing slowly.The light contrasted yellow beams of light shines brightly at the bear-like chair.its funny moustache itches and twiches.His stripey feet stomp,stomp,stomp through the misty night.When I snuggle into this chair I drift asleep.I wake to a sensation of being pushed off.This chair grins as I lay in a huddled heap at it’s feet.His gazing eyes peering at me when i’m on the rusty ground.His black spots stand out as he grins back at me.His eyes sparkle from the bright lightbulb.
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Zoe
6/2/2014 05:26:13 pm
You have some really great imagery for instance 'his pearling eyes simmer in the dawn’s light.' Maybe next time you could work on adding a little bit more detail to your sentences and adding a bit more punctuation but it creates a wonderful vivid picture in my mind.
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Isabelle
6/4/2014 05:57:34 pm
I like the passage, When I snuggle into this chair I drift asleep.I wake to a sensation of being pushed off.This chair grins as I lay in a huddled heap at it’s feet, because it shows a bit of the chairs character.
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olivia
7/2/2014 05:05:08 pm
nice job I really like it and I really like your arm chair writing it looks good :)
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