Looking for my car then when I find it I find out that there is a dog in the car next to me. When it see's me it start's to bark. When the dog bark's I get a fright and drop what I have in my hand's, the dog keep's barking.
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donny
7/30/2014 09:20:58 am
nice Ryan great writing on the story it was well presented and great words NEXT STEP: Write more and use better words but that was the best one I had read
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Elliott
8/6/2014 08:15:48 am
Great story Ryan. It is good. Next step: Keep on writing more and develop more description. keep up the good work
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olly
8/11/2014 04:06:13 pm
Great story Ryan Next step write more next time
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Mrs Garthwaite
8/11/2014 06:43:14 pm
You are beginning to develop a good description of the video. I would like to see you add more detail to your story.
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