A thick coat of green fur spiked up like thorns all over his hunched over back. Dark green eyes like large rounded emeralds with a black dot stared hazily drawing more focus below them, where 8 white teeth hooked over his lip like sharp icicles. Its short arms firmly pressed against his body.
izzy
8/3/2014 07:29:49 am
hey jennax. i love this story! i like how it says its short arms firmly pressed against his body. maybe you could make it a bit longer? ~izzy xx
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Mrs Garthwaite
8/10/2014 06:23:14 pm
You are developing some lovely descriptive language Jenna but I want more! Keep developing this further and add in some character traits like personality and actions.
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Lily
8/12/2014 07:36:06 am
I like your story Jenna.I can really imagine it in my head.Next time you might want to add more.
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