King D was sitting in the dark black corner.His colourful face lights up the room and he slowly wobbed to the warm sunny corner.Suddenly his green eyes are glowing the damp corner. His curvy forehead went into a deep slop and his bright red smooth legs wobbled to the soggy wet heavy door.His look in his green eyes shows he doesn't want to be sat on.His smooth red legs has a black shadow up top with a shiny gold tooth flashing as he grins. His cheeky smile shows how fun and playful he is.
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Kaea
6/4/2014 05:07:53 pm
Nice one, Donny! I liked how you described the look in his eyes, and how you wrote about his cheeky smile. Very well written. Also, do you think you could be more specific when describing colour? For example, instead of green, you could say "his large, emerald-green eyes" or "big, shining eyes as green as the grass." Either than that, very well written.
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Blake:)
6/10/2014 03:28:55 pm
COOL DONNY!
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AuthorHi my name is Donny, Im 11 years old , Im a boy .I play rugby ,baseball, rugby league and soft ball.I live in Dunedin . Archives
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